The fallow flavor of a wasted morning
(an Executive Holy Sonnet)(for JR)The fallow flavor of a wasted morningis more than I can bear. Is this a tasteof empty death, dull, striking without warning?God grant me then a banquet made of...
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Tom,I like this very, very, very much -- especially the couplet. I really do think the repetitions add a touch of greatness, but I wonder if perhaps the third something in the third quatrain is one...
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Tom -I really appreciate your thoughts here....the plea for purpose...and I like the language pattern.I'm trying to figure out exactly what "an Executive Holy Sonnet" is - what a fascinating...
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There seems to be a contradiction between (L12) "this is my life, my meaning. What the hell" and (L14) "will I go?" Or, at least, an internal struggle. This, of course, is the battleground of man's...
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An "Executive Holy Sonnet"... trying to capture the tone of Donne for a modern kind of angst. And what crisis is more threatening than the prospect that one's daily existence is meaningless? This is...
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Hello Tom.How nice to see a rare Spenserian.I enjoyed this, and agree the closing with its repetition is very effective.I suggest you put a colon after "shun" in L11 and delete "for" in L12, for the...
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Tom,I liked the first one quite a bit, although "added value" tweaked my "get me out of this meeting or get me a donut fast" instinct. I think it was exactly what you intended and it worked! The...
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